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cjsmith ([personal profile] cjsmith) wrote2007-09-20 07:18 pm

Brevity is the soul of having thought about it some more

Yesterday's long-winded Plucky Girl In The Face Of Adversity post could really have been summed up in a heck of a lot fewer words.

Background:

1) My feet are @#$!d up
2) #1 will never go away
3) I seriously hate both #1 and #2

The Main Point:

4) #3 will never go away
5) #4 is kind of sane, really.

There. Simple!

[identity profile] ladyqkat.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 03:11 am (UTC)(link)
Yes. But as much as the brevity of #'s 1 through 5 explain the basis of the problem, the verbosity of the previous post probably made you feel a whole lot better. Sort of like a verbal BM.

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 04:02 am (UTC)(link)
There's a lot to be said for that, yeah!

[identity profile] dafydd.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 03:52 am (UTC)(link)
Yah, but this post doesn't give me an excuse to leer at you... ;)

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 04:02 am (UTC)(link)
That's OK. I'm not taking away the other one. ;-)

[identity profile] ladyqkat.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 04:16 am (UTC)(link)
Icon ♥

[identity profile] shoutingboy.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 04:26 am (UTC)(link)
By the way--I read your post yesterday, was really impressed, wanted to say something, didn't manage to. But outside of my head, that behavior could be easily confused with "didn't read" and/or "didn't care". Don't want you to think that.

Hey, when'm I gonna see you, anyway? I could throw another party. Or I could make [livejournal.com profile] juvernaz do it...

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 02:14 pm (UTC)(link)
I was so close to making it to that last one, too! Oh well.

Gonna be at Joe's?

[identity profile] shoutingboy.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 02:44 pm (UTC)(link)
Totally! I'll see you there.

[identity profile] dawnd.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 07:00 am (UTC)(link)
LOL. Yes. Exactly. So, when are you taking up writing instruction manuals for a living?

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 02:15 pm (UTC)(link)
Honestly, that's something I think I'd enjoy doing. (The bit about high-tech ones having to be written while the code is under development, thus making them half wishful thinking and half pure psychic power, would be a bit of a snag.)

This brain intentionally left blank.

[identity profile] dawnd.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 06:11 pm (UTC)(link)
*chuckle* Yes, that can be a challenge. But seriously, I think you'd be GOOD at it. You reduced a whole page of text to its essence without losing any of the important bits. Clear, concise, elegant. Impressive.

And I think if you did this in the biosciences (or any sciences) it would be a GIFT to academia. They so desperately need people who can get to the goshdarned point!

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 08:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! Amazing how much clarity comes from knowing ahead of time what exactly it is I really want to say. Brainstorm-hemorrhaging onto the paper gets it all out; revision two is the Pocket Reference Guide.

[identity profile] hitchhiker.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 07:37 pm (UTC)(link)
"And I'm learning Chinese, says C J Smith"? :)

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 09:03 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, now there'd be quite an achievement: writing technical documentation -- GOOD technical documentation -- in a language so different from one's mother tongue!

(So far, in Mandarin Chinese, I can say "I speak, you speak, he speaks, we speak, you-all speak, they speak." And I can turn it into a question or negate it. But only if I'm reading from my notes with the tone marks!)

[identity profile] quasigeostrophy.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 09:59 am (UTC)(link)
My tendency toward and affinity for concise writing is tested continually having entered academia for a natural science.

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 01:56 pm (UTC)(link)
Uh oh. If I start with bio and chem, and then pile a form of medicine on top of that, I'll be incredibly wordy AND no one will be able to read my writing!

[identity profile] quasigeostrophy.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 09:42 pm (UTC)(link)
*grin*

[identity profile] lkeele.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 07:50 pm (UTC)(link)
Which just goes to show that wit takes work, and thought, and sometimes editing.

I believe the process is as valuable as the product, so I really actually preferred the longer version, because it gave a more complete view of both your state of mind right now and how you arrived at this new (cool) insight.

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 08:57 pm (UTC)(link)
Absolutely. If there's one thing I've learned so far in my attempts to Be A Writer, it's that editing and revising are good stuff.

The longer version definitely gave a better view of the landscape, yeah. This one's all "Mountain A, Mountain B, click here for the Kodak moment, kthxbye."

[identity profile] layer.livejournal.com 2007-09-22 12:21 am (UTC)(link)
simple but it does lose something in translation.

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-24 04:43 pm (UTC)(link)
True. Brevity (a numbered list in particular) doesn't often convey emotion well.

[identity profile] hnybny.livejournal.com 2007-09-22 11:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Just in case you ever get to the point of a walker, this might make you chuckle.

http://community.livejournal.com/thrifthorror/95625.html

[identity profile] cjsmith.livejournal.com 2007-09-24 04:42 pm (UTC)(link)
Hah! I've definitely been at that point, and I regret borrowing and returning a walker rather than getting myself one -- but that one is just spectacularly awesome. Halloween here we come!